For this week’s Inspiration Monday, I’ve continued the story from last week. They each stand alone, but if you want the whole story, read last week’s “I Dreamed This” first.
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This new room is all wrong. I want to go back home. Your pupils are still dilated, your eyes are still bloodshot. The glare of these lights make it so obvious. Don’t you know what will happen as soon as they put it all together?
My awareness is a shadow on the ceiling, anchored by the body in the bed. Witnessing everything, participating in nothing. Unable to be with you, yet unable to leave. You’re looking into eyes that aren’t attached to me anymore. You’re holding the hand I can no longer feel. I see your lips move, I hear your words, but my response steams the glass in front of my face and bounces around inside this prison.
This dream of ours stinks of reality. We did this together, but I know you will take the blame. And I’m the only one who can’t tell you I’ve forgiven you.
The plot thickens! You express the feeling of helplessness so well.
Isn’t it weird how these stories build? Let them sit a few days and they continue on their own.
This is some powerful writing happening here. I really like it.
“My awareness is a shadow on the ceiling,” is particularly fantastic.
Thanks, glad you like it. I don’t like this one as much as the last few, but some are easier to write than others – not sure why that is. Nice to see you out and about again!
This is an excellent piece. I could feel being in a stressful whirlpool of inner desires and fears…
Sorry to make you feel that! But… good!
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My awareness is a shadow on the ceiling, anchored by the body in the bed. Witnessing everything, participating in nothing.
Thank you! I struggle with imagery sometimes. This is very encouraging.
A short piece of writing but extremely powerful. I love the images that you created in my head with phrases like “Witnessing everything, participating in nothing, Unable to be with you, yet unable to leave.” It says a lot and at the same time leaves so much to the imagination.
Thanks for a great read.
I’m very glad you see it like that. Thanks for letting me know. This feedback is so appreciated.
Nice follow-up, Kay. Keep going…
Would love to! Maybe more will come..
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